Is it easy for you to control and hide your anger? Why/ Why not?
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Actually I’m not good at controlling my anger. I can get easily upset and can hardly hide my emotions. And I often regret what I did after I got upset and vent off my anger. When I’m mad, I tend to lose my control and express my emotions to others. My face turns in to red and I do not use proper words that can hurt others’ feelings. I am well aware that I should not do that, however, it is really hard for me to change. I should be calm down and take a deep breath before reacting or responding immediately to attacks or criticism from others. When arguing, debating, being criticized, or facing a situation where I’m about to explore, I should count up to ten before I actually respond. I might need a religion, so I can learn from god how weak a human being is and how tiny existence I am in the universe. If I can realize and keep it in mind all time, I might behavior in a less provocative way. As getting old, we should be more generous, gentle and sophisticated.
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Hi Sir [이름]!
It\'s a great day. How are you?
I hope you had a great day.
You did a marvelous job again. I totally agree with you.We should be careful when we are mad.
There are times that we can\'t choose the right words or actions that we regret afterwards.
Thank you for a fantastic composition. Keep it up!Teacher Nina
Actually I’m not good at controlling my anger.
>> Correct!
I can get easily upset and can hardly hide my emotions.
>> Correct!
And I often regret what I did after I got upset and vent off my anger.
>> Correct!
When I’m mad, I tend to lose my control and express my emotions to others.
>> Correct!
My face turns in to red and I do not use proper words that can hurt others’ feelings.
>> Correct!
I am well aware that I should not do that, however, it is really hard for me to change.
>> Correct!
I should be calm down and take a deep breath before reacting or responding immediately to attacks or criticism from others.
>> I should calm down and take a deep breath before reacting,responding immediately to attack or criticize others.
When arguing, debating, being criticized, or facing a situation where I’m about to explore, I should count up to ten before I actually respond.
>> Correct!>> OR: When arguing, debating, being criticized, or facing a situation where I\'m about to explore, I should count one to ten before I actually respond.
I might need a religion, so I can learn from god how weak a human being is and how tiny existence I am in the universe.
>> Correct! ( check: God ^^)
If I can realize and keep it in mind all time, I might behavior in a less provocative way.
>> Did you mean: If I will be able to realize it and keep it in mind all the time, I might behave in a less provocative way.
As getting old, we should be more generous, gentle and sophisticated.
>> As we get older, we should be more generous, gentle and sophisticated.
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