Is it important to have hobbies?

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Some of your sentences here were a bit difficult to correct.

I\'m not sure if I completely understood what you really meant.

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~Teacher Marie~ ^^

Some people said that it is not important to have hobbies.

>> CORRECT!

However, I preper to have hobbies for two reasons.

>> CORRECT!

>> prefer

First of all, hobbies can reduce stress and worries.

>> CORRECT!

Hobbies are what we like to do and want to do.

>> CORRECT!

Hobbies can make students and workers focus on what they like and want.

>> CORRECT!

So, students and workers can foget about it when they get stress.

>> So they can forget about their stress.

That is why we are into somethings we like, we can be not stressful.

>> That is why when we do something we like, we don\'t feel stressed out.

Let\'s make our own hobbies for reducing our stress.

>> Let\'s do our hobbies and reduce our stress.

Second, students and some workers who are struggling with thier job now can think what they really like now.

>> Students and workers who are struggling can think of what they really like. (doing)

Especially, that kind of thinking is important for students.

>> That way of thinking is especially important for students.

Students are still looking for what they want to be in the future.

>> CORRECT!

A way of having hobbies can connect to think what they want to be in the future and give them to other ways.

>> Hobbies are connected to what they want and it can help them think about their future.

Also, it is helpful for some workers who are concerned about their job now.

>> CORRECT!

if they will find hobbies they like, they can get more confidence that I can do something by myself.

>> If they find hobbies that they like, they can be more confident in doing something by themselves.

The next best thing, they can look for what really want to do with confidence.

>> Another good thing about it is they can look for what they really want to do with more confidence.

If they found their own way for their future, what a beautiful world.
>> If they can both find a way toward a future that they want, then it will be a beautiful world.
Rising cost of eggs are burdened for the middle class like us.

>> The rising cost of eggs is a burden for middle class people like us.

They use eggs everydays for taking in proteins.

>> We use eggs every day as a source of protein.

Especially, at \'sulnal\' such as thanks giving day in South Korea, koreans use a lot of eggs for in preparing their special food.

>> Eggs are especially important in preparing special dishes during Korean holidays, such as Seol Nal and Thanksgiving Day.

So, AI is to shoulder for the middle class the burden of the rising cost.

>> That\'s why AI was a big burden for middle class people.