Is it important to keep up with the latest fashion trend and style? Why or why not?

2019-05-03 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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I think it is not necessary to follow the trend. First of all, the fashion trend and style rotates. The vintage style which was a trend a few years ago is one of the example which granted the boom for several times. So even though you miss one fashion trend, it will come back in few years later. Secondly, the fashion trend is also resulted in marketing strategy of fashion industries in order to sell more clothes. Buying new superfluous clothes is pollutive habit of modern society. Finally, psychologically, keeping up with the latest fashion trend without own fashion style seems to mean the lack of self perception and self esteem. When we don\'t have our own style, we imitate the someone else, like role model diffused on media. That model is mostly far from the reality and changing. Chasing that model even can give you kind of deception on yourself. So i think that keeping up with the fashion trend is useless.

강사 첨삭

I think it is not necessary to follow the trend. 

>> Correct
 First of all, the fashion trend and style rotates. 

>> First of all, fashion trend and style rotates.
 The vintage style which was a trend a few years ago is one of the example which granted the boom for several times. 

>>
 So even though you miss one fashion trend, it will come back in few years later. 

>> Correct
 Secondly, the fashion trend is also resulted in marketing strategy of fashion industries in order to sell more clothes. 

>> Secondly, fashion trend resulted from marketing strategy of fashion industries in order to sell more clothes. 
 Buying new superfluous clothes is pollutive habit of modern society. 

>> Buying new superfluous clothes is a pollutive habit of modern society.
 Finally, psychologically, keeping up with the latest fashion trend without own fashion style seems to mean the lack of self perception and self esteem.

>> Finally, keeping up with the latest fashion trend without a personal fashion style seems to mean the lack of self perception and self esteem.

When we don\'t have our own style, we imitate the someone else, like role model diffused on media.

>> When we don\'t have our own style, we tend to imitate someone else, like models diffused on media.

That model is mostly far from the reality and changing. Chasing that model even can give you kind of deception on yourself. 

>> Chasing that model can even give you a kind of deception on yourself. 
 So I (I) think that keeping up with the fashion trend is useless.

>> Correct

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