Is it necessary for teachers to undergo mandatory drug screening?
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Yes, I think teachers (especially those who teach children) must undergo drug screening. The effects of any drug on our brains, whether large or small in quantity, cannot be ignored. Even in a self-controlled state, some parts of the brain may have a negative effect. It can change his/her behaviour whether he/she conscious or not, and this change will naturally affect the students they teach. Therefore, I agree that teachers undergo mandatory drug screening.
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Hello there again [이름]! I like your insight on this topic and I totally agree with you :)
Aki ~
Yes, I think teachers (especially those who teach children) must undergo drug screening.
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OR>>> I agree that primary teachers must undergo drug screening.
The effects of any drug on our brains, whether large or small in quantity, cannot be ignored.
>>> CORRECT!
OR>>> The effect of any drugs in our system, regardless of the quantity must not be igored.
Even in a self-controlled state, some parts of the brain may have a negative effect.
>>> CORRECT!
OR>>> Even in a disciplined state, there are still those parts of our brain that may suffer a negative effect.
It can change his/her behaviour whether he/she conscious or not, and this change will naturally affect the students they teach.
>>> It can changer ones behavior consciously or unconsciously and this change will naturally affect the students they teach.
Therefore, I agree that teachers undergo mandatory drug screening.
>>> CORRECT!
OR>>Hence, teachers must undergo mandatory drug testing.
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