Is it not an avoidable?
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You got my interest here [이름].
I have a lot of questions and I hope you could answer them on Wednesday.
See you.
~Teacher Shanee^^,
That is a Good motivation.
>>> That is a good motivation.
Some people says “Pressure is bad for our students”
>>> Some people say, Pressure is bad for our students.\"
Yeah I agree, but, I don’t agree too.
>>> I partly agree with that.
I think that is quite natural.
>>> Correct!
I’m not a cold blood man.
>>> I\'m not a cold-blooded man.
Actually, I don’t want to be a man like that.
>>> Correct!
I just wanna be a warm-heart man who has warm spirit and says positive stuffs.
>>> I just want to be a warm-hearted man who has a warm spirit and says positive stuff.
But that’s not a reality.
>>> But that\'s not the reality.
The reality is consist of numerous competition.
>>> The reality consists numerous competitions.
For example, If you want to success your own business(even if that is just a simple business like a restaurant), you should check your competitor.
>>> For example, if you want to succeed in your own business (even if that is just a small business like a restaurant), you should know your competitors.
Because market place is not unlimited.
>>> Because the market place is not unlimited.
About the phenomenon like that, In my major, Economic says “The Market Economy”.
>>> There is a phenomenon like that and in Economics it is called the \"Market Economy.\"
The principle is simple.
>>> Correct!
In our life, Opportunity is limitary.
>>> In this life, the opportunity is limited.
So, all the people pay for something to achieve their goal that they want to do.
>>> So, all people pay for something to achieve their goals.
In this principle, I think many of students must pay for something to make their dream to reality.
>>> In this principle, I think many students do something to make their dream a reality.
In usual, ‘something’ is an effort, an endeavor and studying hard.
>>> In real life, that something requires effort or endeavor and hard work.
So, Don\'t be turning that fact.
>>> So, let\'s not forget that fact.
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