Is it possible to have a healthy lifestyle in the modern world?

2019-10-08 · 첨삭 강사 James

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I think that it is possible to have a healthy life in modern world. There are a lot of healty food recently. We can pick them and eat for well-being. Also, to exercise has emerged in korea such as jyms, pilates and yoga etc. Now people is more pay attention to health then before. I believe that if we decide to have a healthy life, we can live.

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T. James

I think that it is possible to have a healthy life in modern world. 

>>> I think that it is possible to have a healthy life in the modern world. 

There are a lot of healty food recently. 

>>> There are a lot of healthy foods recently. 

We can pick them and eat for well-being.

>>> CORRECT

Also, to exercise has emerged in korea such as jyms, pilates and yoga etc.

>>> Also, to exercise has emerged in Korea such as gyms, Pilates and yoga etc.

Now people is more pay attention to health then before.

>>> Now people is more pay attention to health than before.

I believe that if we decide to have a healthy life, 

>>> CORRECT

we can live.

>>> We can.

>>OR: We can live longer. 

 

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