Is mental health as important as physical fitness? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think mental health is as important as physical fitness. I think they interact on each other, so controlling those by oneself is the point. Based on my experience, when I was on a diet and exercised 2 hours every day for 6 months, my physical fitness was really high level and I could run 1 hours non-stop. At the beginning, my weight gradually lost while my strength increased. My mental health was very happy and full of pleasant. But after a certain period of time, my weight didn\'t lose easily despite of hard exercise. I lost my mind and didn\'t know why I have to keep this situation although my weight didn\'t lose. My mental health was broken down. Eventually, I gave up and my weight gained. Also at the beginning, it was very happy to eat anything, but after all, I got annoyed and depressed to gain weight. Whatever it is, I think controlling by oneself and keeping it is very important.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Sunny!
I totally agree with you. There is a famous saying, ‘What the mind can perceive, the body can achieve.’ It means that if our mind is healthy, it also affects us physically. But when we are not mentally healthy, it can also show in our body. So I agree! Mental and physical health go hand in hand.
- T. Caitlyn
I think mental health is as important as physical fitness.
>> CORRECT
I think they interact on each other, so controlling those by oneself is the point.
>> I think they interact with each other, so managing both by oneself is important.
Based on my experience, when I was on a diet and exercised 2 hours every day for 6 months, my physical fitness was really high level and I could run 1 hours non-stop.
>> Based on my experience, when I was on a diet and exercised two hours every day for six months, my physical fitness improved a lot, and I could run for one hour non-stop.
At the beginning, my weight gradually lost while my strength increased.
>> At the beginning, my weight gradually decreased while my strength increased.
My mental health was very happy and full of pleasant.
>> My mental health was very good, and I felt happy and pleasant.
But after a certain period of time, my weight didn\'t lose easily despite of hard exercise.
>> But after a certain period of time, my weight didn’t decrease easily despite hard exercise.
I lost my mind and didn\'t know why I have to keep this situation although my weight didn\'t lose.
>> I became frustrated and didn’t understand why I had to continue, even though my weight wasn’t decreasing.
My mental health was broken down.
>> My mental health deteriorated.
Eventually, I gave up and my weight gained.
>> Eventually, I gave up, and my weight increased.
Also at the beginning, it was very happy to eat anything, but after all, I got annoyed and depressed to gain weight.
>> At the beginning, I enjoyed eating anything, but later, I became frustrated and depressed about gaining weight.
Whatever it is, I think controlling by oneself and keeping it is very important.
>> Overall, I think managing oneself and maintaining balance is very important.
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