Is mental health more important than physical health?

2023-12-10 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I think mental health is more important than physical health. Mental health mean mental and emotional conditions such as stress, anxiety, and depression. If mental doesn\'t health, t can cause physical damage as well. For example, many stress may cause abnormalities in the body. That\'s why I think intensive care of mental health makes life healthy. example, take a enough rest and sleep, regulary exercise, keep positive mind.

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I think mental health is more important than physical health.
>>> correct   
Mental health mean mental and emotional conditions such as stress, anxiety, and depression.
>>>  Mental health means mental and emotional conditions such as stress, anxiety, and depression. 
If mental doesn\'t health, t can cause physical damage as well.
>>> If the mental condition isn\'t healthy, it can cause physical damage as well.  
For example, many stress may cause abnormalities in the body.
>>> correct  
>>> OR:  For example, too much stress may causes abnormalities in the body.  
That\'s why I think intensive care of mental health makes life healthy.
>>> correct    
example, take a enough rest and sleep, regulary exercise, keep positive mind.
>>> For example, take enough rest and sleep, regularly exercise, keep a positive mind.  

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