Is obesity a big problem in your country? Why do you think that is?
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T Glenda.
Thank you for your warm encouragement. That makes me happy.
Wow, that’s quite interesting topic! Recently, obesity is a sort of disease. Most Korean are not that fat, but some people are worried about obesity. It is not a big problem but we should warn about side effect of obesity. To avoid it, as we know, we need to eat healthy food, do exercise regularly, keep happy mind and thought. It will be not a big problem someday.
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T Glenda.
Thank you for your warm encouragement. That makes me happy.
>> It made me happy.
Wow, that’s quite interesting topic! Recently, obesity is a sort of disease.
>> Correct
Most Korean are not that fat, but some people are worried about obesity.
>>Correct
It is not a big problem but we should warn about side effect of obesity.
>>It is not a big problem but we should be warned about side effect of obesity.
To avoid it, as we know, we need to eat healthy food, do exercise regularly, keep happy mind and thought.
>> Correct
It will be not a big problem someday.
>> Correct
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