Is obesity a disease?
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Yes, I think so. There was a TV program that helping people to lose weight. In that program some people made appearances for losing weight. Before making that program, the director had interviews of participants. In that interviews majority of participants told that having mental problems is the reason why they became obesity. While the director was shooting the TV program. The director made psychotherapy courses to help the participants. It was successful. After that program, many participants got new life.
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Thank you for writing an essay related to our essay question. I agree that obesity is a disease and can result to other different diseases such as mental problems and physical problems.
How\'s your day going so far?
Thank you for writing an essay related to our essay question. I agree that obesity is a disease and can result to other different diseases such as mental problems and physical problems.
Obese people could suffer from a range of different diseases such as heart problems, stroke, diabetes, liver problems, and hormonal problems to name a few.
It is imperative to stay fit and healthy because this will help us prevent from acquiring different diseases.
I hope you\'re doing great.
It is imperative to stay fit and healthy because this will help us prevent from acquiring different diseases.
I hope you\'re doing great.
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~Teacher Charry
>> CORRECT!
There was a TV program that helping people to lose weight.
>> There was a TV program that was helping people to lose weight.
In that program some people made appearances for losing weight.
>> In that program some people made appearances to lose weight.
Before making that program, the director had interviews of participants.
>> Before making that program, the director had interviews with the participants.
In that interviews majority of participants told that having mental problems is the reason why they became obesity.
>> In those interviews, majority of the participants told him that having a mental problem is the reason why they became obese.
While the director was shooting the TV program. The director made psychotherapy courses to help the participants.
>> While the director was shooting the TV program, the participants underwent psychotherapy courses to help them.
It was successful.
>> CORRECT!
After that program, many participants got new life.
>> After that program, many participants got a new life.
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