Is obesity a great problem in where you live?
학생이 쓴 원문
Yes, obesity is also a problem in korea. Obesity makes people lazy so that It causes a lot of disease. I heard that top three of big illness are come from obesity. The way that prevents it is going on a diet. That\'s why going on a diet is boom here. Almost Korean go to gym and take care healty regularly.
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Thank you for this [이름]:) We need to have a healthy lifestyle.
T. James
Yes, obesity is also a problem in korea.
>>> Yes, obesity is also a problem in Korea.
Obesity makes people lazy so that It causes a lot of disease.
>>> Obesity makes people lazy, that\'s why It causes a lot of disease.
I heard that top three of big illness are come from obesity.
>>> I heard that the top three of big illness are coming from obesity.
The way that prevents it is going on a diet. That\'s why going on a diet is boom here.
>>> The way that prevents it is going on a diet. That\'s why going on a diet is booming here.
Almost Korean go to gym and take care healty regularly.
>>> Almost Korean go to the gym and take care about their health regularly.
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