Is our money safe at the bank?

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~Teacher Eunice

A debt-free and robust bank is generally considered safe.
>>> A debt-free and a robust bank is generally considered safe.  

Because keeping the money in the house can make it bulky and the thief can easily steal it.
>>> Because keeping the money in the house can make it bulky and the thieves can easily steal it.  

Though banks sometimes have thieves, banks generally have a thorough security.
>>> Correct!

To secure such security at home is more money than I have.
>>> I need more money than I have to secure our home. 

It has no meaning.
>>> Correct! 

Thieves are often found among bankers, of course.
>>> Thieves are often found among banks, of course. 

But I trust the security of the bank more than the security of the my house, so I will keep the money in the bank before the war.

>>> But I trust the security of the bank more than the security of my house, so I will keep my money in the bank before the war. 
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To. Eunice teacher

>>> To Teacher Eunice 
 Your encouragement has been a great strength to me today.

>>> Correct!
 I will believe to your advice and study harder.

>>> I do believe in your advice, to study harder.
 Thanks a lot.

>>> Correct!

>>> OR: Thank you very much!
 From. ella~

>>> From, Ella.