Is overpopulation a problem in your town or country?
학생이 쓴 원문
In korea, problems be suffered about low population.
Women who living korea don’t want that they lost their own lifestyle.
life experiences changed by past years about women.
Now, women woking in their jobs and following their dreams.
So they don’t want to pregnancy.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Su!
Thank you for answering your homework. Your ideas are great.
~T. Divina^^
1. In korea, problems be suffered about low population.
>>In Korea, low population rate is a problem.
2. Women who living korea don’t want that they lost their own lifestyle.
>>Women who are living Korea don\'t want to lose their own lifestyles.
3. life experiences changed by past years about women.
>>In the past years, the life experiences of women changed.
4. Now, women woking in their jobs and following their dreams.
>>Now, women work on their jobs and follow their dreams.
5. So they don’t want to pregnancy.
>>That is why they don\'t want to get pregnant.
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