Is peer pressure beneficial or harmful?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think peer pressure is very harmful. Here\'s a story. When I am middle school student, we were having atmosphere like if you don\'t get \"north face \" Padding, you can\'t hang out us. it was so expensive but I couldn\'t help to buy this or I couldn\'t hang out friends. I think Money difference should not exist during they are student.
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Hi [이름]! That sounds awful. That\'s discrimination already. Well I hope this would be put to an end so that no other students can experience the same thing :(
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I think peer pressure is very harmful.
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Here\'s a story.
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When I am middle school student, we were having atmosphere like if you don\'t get \"north face \" Padding, you can\'t hang out us. i
>>When I was a middle school student, we had a thing that is you don\'t have a \"North Face Padding\", you can\'t hang out us.
It was so expensive but I couldn\'t help to buy this or I couldn\'t hang out friends.
>> That thing was very expensive but I couldn\'t help but buy it so that I could hang out with my friends.
I think Money difference should not exist during they are student.
>> I think financial discrimination should not exist for students.
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