Is physical health more important than mental health or vice versa?
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Is physical health more important than mental health, or vice versa?
Of course, both of them are important. But I think physical health is more important than mental health. Because when we have healthy body, we can be energetic on everythng and can enjoy a happy life. Also, when we are in good condition, we are in a good mood and can have good relationships with others. So we need to excersise at least 3 times a week for both good body health and mental health.
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Thank you for this Ms. [Name]!
Of course, both of them are important.
>>> correct
But I think physical health is more important than mental health. Because when we have healthy body, we can be energetic on everythng and can enjoy a happy life.
>>> But/however, I think physical health is more important than mental health because when we have healthy body, we can be energetic on everything and can enjoy a happy life.
Also, when we are in good condition, we are in a good mood and can have good relationships with others.
>>> correct
So we need to excersise at least 3 times a week for both good body health and mental health.
>>> OR: So we need to exercise at least 3 times a week for both good body and mental health.
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