Is religion important?

2022-07-21 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I think everyone thinks different that religion is important. Because there are many people who go to meeting because they believe religion but there are many people who do not believe religion. So I think there is people who think religion is important and people who think it is not important will be divided.

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I think everyone thinks different that religion is important.

>> I think everyone thinks differently regarding whether religion is important or not.

Because there are many people who go to meeting because they believe religion but there are many people who do not believe religion.

>> It is because there are many people who believe in it and there are some that don\'t.

So I think there is people who think religion is important and people who think it is not important will be divided.

>> So I think there are some people who think that religion is important and some of them don\'t.

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