Is social media good for society or is it harmful?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think social media like Facebook or Twitter is just self satisfaction or self promotion. Most social media actions are marketing activities or temporary solution of loneliness. Then that is waste of time and not good for mentality.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jack,
Thank you for doing your homework. I appreciate how clearly and confidently you shared your opinion. Your answer is direct, honest, and very “you,” which I like a lot.
You made a strong point about social media being more about self-satisfaction and self-promotion. That’s a very realistic and bu[이름]ess-minded perspective, especially coming from someone who understands marketing and human behavior. I also like how you connected social media to temporary loneliness and mental well-being, that shows depth and awareness beyond just surface use.
Your message feels thoughtful and grounded, not emotional or extreme, and that makes it convincing. You’re expres[이름]g your ideas more smoothly, and your confidence in English is definitely growing. Keep going like this! Clear thinking always leads to clear expression.
~Teacher Cathy
I think social media like Facebook or Twitter is just self satisfaction or self promotion.
>>I think social media, like Facebook or Twitter, is mainly for self-satisfaction or self-promotion.
Most social media actions are marketing activities or temporary solution of loneliness.
>>Most social media activities are marketing efforts or temporary solutions to loneliness.
Then that is waste of time and not good for mentality.
>>Therefore, it is a waste of time and not good for one’s mental health.
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