Is sport an important part of education? What does it teach people?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it is true that sport is an important part of education.
first, If students experience it, they increase knowledge about the sports and cooperation.
second, if some students want a sport playes, their dreames will come true.
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Is sport an important part of education? What does it teach people?
I think it is true that sport is an important part of education.
>> OR: I believe sport plays an essential role in education.
first, If students experience it, they increase knowledge about the sports and cooperation.
>> First, if students experience it, they increase their knowledge about sports and learn cooperation.
second, if some students want a sport playes, their dreames will come true.
>> Second, if some students want to be sports players, their dreams will come true.
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