Is starting a family necessary for a happy life?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, it depends on what do you think is important in your life.
Someone might feel happy in their single life.
But, for me, starting a family is necessary for my happy life.
Because one of the goals of my life is I will be be a good husband and father.
강사 첨삭
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In my opinion, it depends on what do you think is important in your life.
>> In my opinion, it depends on what you think is important in your life.
Someone might feel happy in their single life.
>> Some people might feel happy living a single life.
But, for me, starting a family is necessary for my happy life.
>> But for me, starting a family is necessary for a happy life.
Because one of the goals of my life is I will be be a good husband and father.
>> Because one of my life goals is to be a good husband and father.
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