Is television one of the best inventions of all times? Why?

2017-01-26 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

학생이 쓴 원문

I agee with your question. first, It give us right of choice following the viewer`s aim. someone alert TV control viewer`s thought. But I have a differnt opinion. because we have the right of choice the program. If someone wants to learn something. they just turns on education channel. it is very use ful and simple. second, It become a friends. when I have not any plans, I use the dramas and movies channel. and especailly Old people are prefering to see the TV programs. It prvents old person with thier`s lonely. finally, Thesdays I can use it various aim excepting see the TV. thesedays It is possible to connect internet by the smart TV. so, It makes me the simple lives. and By using other device, I can play the vidio games. follwing these reasons I argee with that question.

강사 첨삭

Hello JM,
Remember that learning English requires action. One small action is more powerful than reading hundreds of articles. Yes, we know it is very hard to do things, even if they are good for us.
I commend you for being so active and alert to listen and speak the language; continue that attitude because you can achieve many things in learning English.
Don\'t pull yourself down!!!!
T. Jeny

I agree with your question.
>>correct
first, It give us right of choice following the viewer`s aim. someone alert TV control viewer`s thought.
>>First, it gives us the right of choice following the viewer`s aim. Televisions can control someone\'s point of view.
But I have a different opinion because we have the right of choice the program.
>>But I have a different opinion because we have the right to choose the program we want to watch.
If someone wants to learn something. they just turns on education channel.
>>If someone wants to learn something, they will just turn on an education channel.
it is very useful and simple.
>>correct
second, It become a friends.
>>Second, it can become our friend.
when I have not any plans, I use the dramas and movies channel.
>>When I don\'t have any plans, I can watch a drama or turn on a movie channel.
and especailly Old people are prefering to see the TV programs. it prvents old person with thier`s lonely.
>>Especially for old people who prefer watching TV, which prevents them to be lonely.
finally, Thesdays I can use it various aim excepting see the TV.
>>And finally, it can be use with various purposes.
thesedays It is possible to connect internet by the smart TV. so, It makes me the simple lives. and By using other device, I can play the vidio games.
>>It is possible for us to connect with the internet using smart TV these days thus it makes our lives simple. Any by using our devices, we can play video games.
follwing these reasons I argee with that question.
>>With the following reasons, I agree with the question.

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