Is there a machine you feel you could not live without ? Explain.

2016-12-26 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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I think the machine that makethings can't live without in korea . People like to see that machine makes thing. And when we don't have any machine we have to make all things what we wanted. I don't like that machines are not in korea. TEACHER I want to choose topic so I choose it one it is 12 /23 fri article 1 Good bye see you in Monday.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!


Thank you for trying to answer the composition topic but I think you misunderstood the homework.

I was asking \'what machine can YOU not live without?\'. Machines are usually things that run on electricity; for example, the most common machines that people use are cellphones, televisions, computers, microwave ovens, refrigerators, and a lot more. So which of these machines do you use frequently that if this machine would disappear, you would not know what to do?

The correction I placed here is writeen in a way that it answers the composition topic.


All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==



I think the machine that makethings can\'t live without in korea .
People like to see that machine makes thing.
And when we don\'t have any machine we have to make all things what we wanted.
I don\'t like that machines are not in korea.


>> I think that Koreans cannot live without the machines that enable the manufacture of goods because if we don\'t have these machines, we would be making various goods by hand.


 TEACHER I want to choose topic so I choose it one it is 12 /23 fri article 1

>> Teacher, I would like to discuss the first article dated 12/23/2016  and entitled \"Software Engineer Known as the \'Dog Father\' Cares for Over 700 Strays in India\".


 Good bye see you in Monday.

>> Goodbye. I\'ll see you on Monday.

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