Is there something that you believe is truly worth fighting for?
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I am so happy that you expressed your ideas in writing, in a marvelous way.
Of course, I would also fight for my family’s safety.
I guess anything that we do that we really like is worth fighting for, as long as we are happy.
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Teacher Nina
I hope I can say that it is truly worth fighting for to secure freedom, justice, equality, and peace.
>> I hope I can say that securing freedom, justice, equality, and peace it is truly worth fighting for.
However, those words are too vague and abstract principles that appear on the book.
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As an individual, they are too grandiose concepts and have little to do with our daily lives.
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>> OR: As an individual, they are too grandiose concepts and don\'t do something that has a big impact in our daily lives.
A more practical point of view is that I would fight for my family’s safety and interest as most general people would do.
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When my family, relatives, friends, or colleagues’ rights are infringed by someone or something, I would do whatever I can.
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In the modern society, we tend to be too selfish and react vigorously when our interests are taken away, while we often do not care how other people’s rights are abused.
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It is now time for all of us to put emphasis and priority on the happiness and wellbeing of all our citizens, not on just my individual wealth, although it is easier said than done.
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In addition, the process of achieving something should be highly regarded regardless of the results.
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