Is this kind of tracking the best way to deal with the virus?
학생이 쓴 원문
Come to think of it, contact tracking policy seemed to be taken to minimize the area health government would control or even shut down for the virus not to spread anymore. So I think it was appropriate and timely so that it could contribute to controlling COVID-19 effectively at an early stage of the COVID-19 pandemic. However, some people including pundits criticized it could infringe on privacy which is protected by law. This argument still goes on. Now, no more contact tracking of COVID-19 patients as the number of confirmed cases of COVID-19 is decreasing.
Our government may be comforting itself that it was a necessary evil to do this controvercial contact tracking. However, the government has to make clear principles before it’s too late because the government’s administration should be based on principles and laws. Our government shouldn’t bumble anymore, triggering social arguments whenever something unexpected, such as a pandemic happens beyond our control.
강사 첨삭
Hi Steve.
T. Irene
Come to think of it, contact tracking policy seemed to be taken to minimize the area health government would control or even shut down for the virus not to spread anymore.
>>> Come to think of it, the contact tracing policy was undertaken to minimize the area that the government\'s health agency shut down or close down to control and stop the spread of the virus.
So I think it was appropriate and timely so that it could contribute to controlling COVID-19 effectively at an early stage of the COVID-19 pandemic.
>>> So I think it was undertaken appropriately and timely so that it could contribute to controlling COVID-19 effectively at the early stage of the pandemic.
However, some people including pundits, criticized it could infringe on privacy which is protected by law.
>>> Correct.
This argument still goes on.
>>> Correct.
Now, no more contact tracking of COVID-19 patients as the number of confirmed cases of COVID-19 is decreasing.
>>> Now, there\'s no more contact tracking of COVID-19 patients as the number of confirmed cases of COVID-19 is decreasing.
Our government may be comforting itself that it was a necessary evil to do this controversial contact tracking.
>>> Now, there\'s no more contact tracking of COVID-19 patients as the number of confirmed cases of COVID-19 is decreasing.
Our government may be comforting itself that it was a necessary evil to do this controversial contact tracking.
>>> Correct.
However, the government has to make clear principles before it’s too late because the government’s administration should be based on principles and laws.
>>> Correct.
Our government shouldn’t bumble anymore, triggering social arguments whenever something unexpected, such as a pandemic happens beyond our control.
>>> Correct.
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