Is this sectence right?
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The beam window is designed to be a shell with 100 mm in diameter and 0.5 mm in thickness, which is a part of a sphere with 500-mm radius, considering that the size and radioactivity of target and the penetrability of proton beams.
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Hello there [이름]!
I guess the sentences is almost perfect.
Anyway, thanks for sending me this.
Have a good weekend ahead!
~Teacher Shanee
The beam window is designed to be a shell with 100 mm in diameter and 0.5 mm in thickness, which is a part of a sphere with 500-mm radius, considering that the size and radioactivity of target and the penetrability of proton beams.
>>> The beam window is designed to be a shell with 100 mm in diameter and 0.5 mm in thickness which is a part of a sphere with 500-mm radius, considering the size and radioactivity of the target and the penetrability of proton beams.
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