Is your government good at dealing with and tackling social issues?
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Hi there Sir [이름]!
Happy Friday! Thank you for doing your essay even if you are busy with the workshop.
Sir, I requested the managers to put your class on hold because you might have forgotten to postpone our class today.
Our Korean managers tried to call you but they weren\'t able to reach you. I\'m just worried that if you\'ll be absent one day of our class will be wasted.
I know that every class is important to you. Thanks for your understanding.
I hope that you will have fun with your colleagues tonight and come up with great strategies to keep your customers.
I heard a lot of things about the incident from you and from my other students too.
Let us hope that there will be some progress about it. I am excited to hear your stories about your workshop on Monday.
Have a blast this weekend! Take Care! Talk to you on Monday.
Teacher Nina
I don\'t think that the Korean government is good at dealing with social issues.
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One of good examples is the disaster of Sewol ferry’s recent capsize that led to more than 300 young students dead and 11 people still missing.
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>> OR: One of the good examples of it is the disaster of Sewol\'s recent capsize that led to more than 300 young students dead and 11 people are still missing.
There have been a lot of disputes and controversies over the cause of the ferry’s sinking and the delayed rescue operation.
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Moreover the government has been harshly criticized for managing the incident poorly.
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It even announced incorrect death toll several times.
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It did not have so called a control tower that could oversee the rescue operations, brief the public the status of the rescue operations, consult the families of the victims, etc.
>> It didn\'t have a so called control tower that could oversee the rescue operations, brief the public about th status of the rescue opreations, consult the families of the victims, etc.
It showed amateurism in handling the incident in all aspects.
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Another example is the case of prime minister nominee’s self withdrawal of his nomination.
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>> OR: Another example is the case of the prime minister nominees self withdrawal of his nomination.
It failed twice in nominating the prime minister after the incumbent prime mister rendered his resignation, taking the responsibility for not properly handling the incident.
>> Correct!
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