It is alright to ask a person’s age to some degree.

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In Korea, many people usually ask others’ age when they meet first time.

>> In Korea, many people usually ask another person\'s age when they meet for the first time.
This is because Korean people like to have superiority among people by age.

>> This is because Korean people like to have superiority in a group because of their age.
In my case, l don\'t like this culture because it\'s not fair.

>>  l don\'t like this culture because it\'s not fair.
For exmply, one who is old doesn\'t mean that one has wisdom.

>> For example, one who is old doesn\'t mean that he has wisdom. 
Because young people also can have wisdom.

>> Young people can also have wisdom.
 So, most Korean people usually ask other people’s age when they meet first time, but I don\'t like that.

>> Most Korean people ask for the age of another but I don\'t like this practice.