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2011-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Karla

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I agree creative artists should always be given the freedom.It is because force restriction is harmful free ideas. A number of artists is received ideas by no limit situation like a cultural and policy, language.It is well-known fact that think of the freedom make special something. For example: America have a many artist rather than korea.Between america and korea is whether or not people do freely thought. Korea has a very restriction government.As seen from the example,there is no doubt that one's way of creative thinking make a creative arts In conclusion,No government restriction is a very helpful to free expression to creative artist.

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Hi [이름]! I hope this helps! I'll see you again tomorrow. Have a great rest tonight and a happy Wednesday tomorrow. Good night! -T.Louise- I agree creative artists should always be given the freedom. >> I agree that creative artists should always be given the freedom. It is because force restriction is harmful free ideas. >> It is because force restriction is harms free ideas. A number of artists is received ideas by no limit situation like a cultural and policy, language. >> A number of artists received ideas by no limit like culture, policy, and language. It is well-known fact that think of the freedom make special something. >> It is a well-known fact that freedom makes something special.  For example: America have a many artist rather than korea. >>An example is the fact that America has more artists than Korea does. Between america and korea is whether or not people do freely thought. >>The difference between Americans and Koreans is the freedom that they have.  Korea has a very restriction government. >> Korea has a very strict government.        As seen from the example,there is no doubt that one's way of creative thinking make a creative arts >> As seen from the example, there is no doubt that one's creative thinking helps in making creative arts. In conclusion,No government restriction is a very helpful to free expression to creative artist. >>In conclusion, I believe that the government affects the freedom of its people as well as the freedom of expression of creative artists.

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