It is better for children if the whole family including aunts, uncles and grandparents are involved
학생이 쓴 원문
I didn\'t live with grandparents when I was growing up. It was not common to live with whole family members in my generation. The unit of family had been changed already. People preferred to have small family and it became standard in this century. Koreans were influenced by the Confucian culture a lot and we still followed Confucian manner that stress the importance of basic manner to old people. It means that elderly gives a good scolding continuously to child. Young people really hate someone to nag and don\'t want to be bothered by anybody. Generation Z would like to express their personality by any ways and don\'t want to be taught by adults. If they had to live with whole family, they would be crazy and make a lot of conflicts among family members. I also feel awkward whenever I see my parents. There are nothing to say to my parents, especially my father. It is because of our culture, relationship with parents and environment of growing up. I feel really sorry for everything to my
강사 첨삭
Hi there Mr. [이름]~! ^^ Thanks for your opinion about the essays I give you. I noticed that most of your sentences are becoming perfect! Keep expressing your mind~! ^^ Have a good time!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I didn\'t live with my grandparents when I was growing up.
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It was not common to live with the whole family members in my generation.
>>> CORRECT
The unit of family had been changed already.
>>> CORRECT
People preferred to have small family and it became standard in this century.
>>> CORRECT
Koreans were influenced by the Confucian culture a lot and we still followed Confucian manner that stress the importance of basic manner to old people.
>>> CORRECT
It means that the elderly give good scolding continuously to children.
>>> CORRECT
Young people really hate someone to nag and don\'t want to be bothered by anybody.
>>> Young people really hate to be nagged at and don\'t want to be bothered by anybody.
Generation Z would like to express their personality by any ways and don\'t want to be taught by adults.
>>> CORRECT
If they had to live with the whole family, they would be crazy and make a lot of conflicts among family members.
>>> CORRECT
I also feel awkward whenever I see my parents.
>>> CORRECT
There are nothing to say to my parents, especially to my father.
>>> CORRECT
It is because of our culture, relationship with parents and environment of growing up.
>>> CORRECT
I feel really sorry for everything to my...
>>> CORRECT
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