It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree

As the nature of the world is made of a full of colors, diverse people with different opinion naturally exist forward the given topic. Some people may hold the idea that it is better for children to live in the countryside than in a big city. However, I don't agree with this with following reasons. Firstly, children can broaden their knowledge much more in city because various education institutes exist. Learning second language can be an example of this. There are diverse institutes related to it such as Japanese and Chinese. But in the countryside, language institutes are insufficient; thush, children in rural have less opportunity to learn about it. Secondly, it is possible for children to enjoy their life with a variety of entertainment including theater, amusement park and gorgeous restaurant. On the other hand, children who live in the countryside seldom enjoy and experience these interesting facilities. Thus, I think that it is better for children to live in a big city.

Good morning Miss [이름]! Thank you for sharing your thoughts and ideas regarding the essay question. It is really important for children to be exposed to a lot of good things so they can learn and develop their abilities. Anyway, please go over my corrections. See you! ~Kelly^^ As the nature of the world is made of a full of colors, diverse people with different opinion naturally exist forward the given topic. >> As the nature of the world is full of colors, diverse people with different opinion naturally exists. Some people may hold the idea that it is better for children to live in the countryside than in a big city. >> Correct. However, I don\'t agree with this with following reasons. >> However, I don\'t agree with this due to the following reasons. Firstly, children can broaden their knowledge much more in city because various education institutes exist. >> Correct. Learning second language can be an example of this. >> Learning a second language can be an example for this. There are diverse institutes related to it such as Japanese and Chinese. >> There are diverse institutes related to it such as Japanese institute and Chinese institute. But in the countryside, language institutes are insufficient; thush, children in rural have less opportunity to learn about it. >> But in the countryside, language institutes are insufficient; thus, children have less opportunity to learn those languages.Secondly, it is possible for children to enjoy their life with a variety of entertainment including theater, amusement park and gorgeous restaurant. >> Secondly, it is possible for children to enjoy their life with a variety of entertainment including theaters, amusement parks and  fancy restaurants. On the other hand, children who live in the countryside seldom enjoy and experience these interesting facilities. >> Correct.Thus, I think that it is better for children to live in a big city. >> Correct.