It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree

2016-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I disagree. In my perspective, it's better for children that they grow up in a big city. In korea, the educational system is important when we choose a place for living. The big city have a better educational system than the countryside. Though the children can grow up healthily, that isn't an easy decision. Including the educational system, the coutryside don't have many convenient facilities like hospitals.

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Great job, [이름]! Thank you so much for expressing your opinion in writing. I totally agree with your ideas. Living in the city is the best place for children to grow up. However, they should be monitored because of the bad influences or things that are in the city. Have a great night and weekend ahead of you. See you on Monday. Take care. Teacher Nina   I disagree. >> correct In my perspective, it\'s better for children that they grow up in a big city. >> correct In korea, the educational system is important when we choose a place for living. >>  Did you mean: In korea, the educational system is important when we choose a place to live.The big city have a better educational system than the countryside. >> correct Though the children can grow up healthily, that isn\'t an easy decision. >> Though the children can grow up healthy,  it isn\'t an easy decision to make.Including the educational system, the coutryside don\'t have many convenient facilities like hospitals. >> Did you mean: Aside from the educational system, the coutryside don\'t have many convenient facilities like hospitals.

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