It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.

2019-03-18 · 첨삭 강사 Gracelyn

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It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Big city\'s grow up good things: 다양한 문화 체험을 할 수 있다.음악회 미술 전시회 체육활동 It could be experience many thing are various. for example music concert, exihbition, sports camp. Countryside grow up good things: There are good for health that are a helpful nature, ground, tree,forest fresh air.

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Great Monday to you Ms. [Name] se! 
This is the first day of another busy week and I hope that you were able to start the week right. 
Be positive and always be happy.

It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. 
>>correct
Big city\'s grow up good things:
>>There are many advantages if you will grow up in the city.
It could be experience many thing are various. for example music concert, exihbition, sports camp.
>>You can experience many things like concerts, exhibition, and sports camp.
Countryside grow up good things: 
>>There are also many good things in the countryside.
There are good for health that are a helpful nature, ground, tree,forest fresh air.
>>Living in the countryside is good because of the fresh air.

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