It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree
학생이 쓴 원문
I agree with this idea.
Because, in these days, the most of the students have to extra work or go academy after school especially in Asia country. So they don\'t have enough time to enjoy what they want.
Therefore, I agree that it is better for children to grow up in the country side before they start the study.
In the country side, there are a lot of thing we can\'t see or learn in the city. And also, I Believe that the children can be healty and get so many experiences when they grow near the nature.
So in my opinion, the country side is better than the city for children.
강사 첨삭
1. I agree with this idea.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I agree with this opinion.
2. Because, in these days, the most of the students have to extra work or go academy after school especially in Asia country.
>>Because, these days, most of the students have to work extra or go to academy after school especially in an Asian country.
3. So they don\'t have enough time to enjoy what they want.
>>So, they don\'t have enough time to enjoy what they want.
4. Therefore, I agree that it is better for children to grow up in the country side before they start the study.
>>Therefore, I agree that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside before they start to study.
5. In the country side, there are a lot of thing we can\'t see or learn in the city.
>>In the country side, there are a lot of things we can\'t see or learn in the city.
6. And also, I Believe that the children can be healty and get so many experiences when they grow near the nature.
>>And also, I believe that children can be healthy and can get so many experience when they grow nearby nature.
7.So in my opinion, the country side is better than the city for children.
>>So, in my opinion, the countryside is better than the city for children.
Good sentences, Shiloh!
Sorry for answering your composition so late.
But, I\'m glad I\'m back and I hope to talk to you again soon.
Hope you\'ve been great for the past weeks.
- T. Melody ^^
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