It is better to save money

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA

My opinion is that it is better to save money for the future. 

>>> CORRECT
Firstly, we can\'t know what is happen in the future.

>>> First, we can\'t tell what will happen in the future.

You can have a accident all of sudden.

>>> You could be in an accident all of sudden.

Or one of your family have a big trouble which is needed much money to solve.

>>> Or one of your family members could have a big trouble which needs much money to solve.

Anyway we don\'t know the future we need to save the money. 

>>> Anyway, we don\'t know anything about the future so we need to save money. 
Secondly, If you save the money you can gather much money.

>>> Secondly, if you save money you can earn much money.

For one\'s life I think that a house or a car is essential.

>>> For someone, I think a house or a car is essential.

Those are expensive one so if you want to buy them you need a much money.

>>> Those are expensive ones so if you want to buy them you need much money.

So gathering the money important to buy such kinds of essential for one\'s life. 

>>> So earning/saving money is important to buy such necessary things in life.
 Those are the reasons why I believe it is better to save money.

>>> CORRECT