It is hard to overcome the gap
학생이 쓴 원문
Have you ever watched \'Parasite\'? It took a lot of awards in the big film award ceremony. Many people around the world focus on the gap between the rich and the poor through Parasite.
I think that the rich are growing richer, and the poor are growing poorer. Of course, there exist opposite cases, but I want to say about possibility. In case of the rich, they have high probability to become richer.
The rich have many chances to earn money because they have money. If they can buy a building, they can earn rental fee. The building would be also more expensive. In a word, it is possible for them to invest because of their property.
They also have a chance to come back. This means that even if they fail, they have power to overcome their difficulties because they have enough money. They can live well although they lose a little money, and they can invest again.
The poor face the opposite cases. They don\'t have many chances to be the rich. *1000 letters are small to write my thought
강사 첨삭
Great composition today!
I definitely agree with your point. It\'s a bit saddening how you weren\'t able to continue writing your thoughts on here.
But your overall view has been expressed very well.
Good job!
~Teacher Eve.
Have you ever watched \'Parasite\'?
>> Correct!
It took a lot of awards in the big film award ceremony.
>> Correct!
>> OR: It received a lot of awards in the big film award ceremony.
Many people around the world focus on the gap between the rich and the poor through Parasite.
>> Correct!
I think that the rich are growing richer, and the poor are growing poorer.
>> Correct!
Of course, there exist opposite cases, but I want to say about possibility.
>> Of course, there exist to be two opposite cases and I want to talk about the possibilities of both.
In case of the rich, they have high probability to become richer.
>> In the case of the rich, they have a high probability of becoming richer.
The rich have many chances to earn money because they have money.
>> Correct!
If they can buy a building, they can earn rental fee.
>> Correct!
The building would be also more expensive.
>> The building would also be more expensive.
In a word, it is possible for them to invest because of their property.
>> Correct!
They also have a chance to come back.
>> Correct!
This means that even if they fail, they have power to overcome their difficulties because they have enough money.
>> This means that even if they fail, they have the power to overcome their difficulties because they have enough money.
They can live well although they lose a little money, and they can invest again.
>> They can live well even if they lose a little money, they can invest again.
The poor face the opposite cases.
>> The poor faces the opposite case.
They don\'t have many chances to be the rich.
>> Correct!
*1000 letters are small to write my thought
>> Correct!
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