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A MAGESTIC Monday again to you! ^.^

Once again, I would like to thank you for making another homework! ^^

Thanks a lot! ^^,

By the way, you made a well-composed writing.

However, he still have faults in relations to singular and plural words.

That\'s all! ^^

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... Teacher Paula ... ^.~

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Every subjects are important and have their own benefits.

>> Every subject is important and had its own benefits.

Most students do not know what their strength is, which field their are interested in, what they want to be in the future.

>> Most student do not know what their strengths are, which field they are interested in, and what they want to be in the future.

I disagree that studying history and literature are more important than other subjects for students.

>> I disagree that for students, studying history and literature is more important than other subjects.

If students find out their aptitude or have already chosen a major, they must concentrate on studying specific subjects.

>> If students find out their aptitudes or have already  chosen their majors, they must concentrate on studying specific subjects.

If it is not, they have to study all subjects to broad their knowledge and find out their talent, aptitude and job in their future.

>> If not, they have to study all subjects to have broad knowledge and find out their talents, aptitudes and jobs in the future.

I have seen many people who are expert in their profession without having any ideas about other fields.

>> I have seen many people who are experts in their professions without having any ideas about their fields.

They have encountered a lot of difficulties with financial problem, because they asked a financial counselor to solve all their problem.

>> They have encountered a lot of difficulties with financial problems, because they asked financial counselors to solve all their worries.

Hence, I think people should learn various subjects.

>> CORRECT!

>> OR: Thus, I think people should learn various subjects.

We might need some knowledge in various situation some day.

>> We might need some knowledge on various situation some day.