It is not just a fierce dog.

Thanks for writing this  MISS [이름]!

That was a terrible accident..

I agree with your opinion.

Before taking care of a pet, we must consider a lot of things. C\")

We must ask ourselves if we are willing to commit or if we can take the responsibility.

 Anyway, kindly go over the corrections below. See you on Friday! 

~Teacher Shanee^^,

These days,more and more people keep pet dogs in Korea.

>>> These days, the number of people who keep dogs as pets in Korea is increasing.

It is so easy to feel lonely in modern society that people just buy a dog without knowing about dogs at all.

>>> OR: People who are lonely or depressed just buy a dog even if they don\'t know anything about dogs.

When choosing a dog,they only care about how a dog looks like.

>>> Correct!

If it looks cool,they get it even if it is a kind of dogs that are not easy to handle.

>>> If it looks cool, they buy it even if it is a breed which is not easy to handle.

These situations sometimes cause a serious problem.

>>> Correct!

Recently,there was a fatal accident related to this.

>>> Correct!

Choi Si-won,member of K-pop group Super Junior,had a French bulldog which was known as the fighting dog improved breed.

>>> Choi Si-won, a member of K-pop group called Super Junior, had a French bulldog which is known as a fighting dog breed.

The dog bit a restaurateur and he died after 6days being attacked by it.

>>> The dog bit a restaurateur and he died after 6 days.

When the accident happened,if the owner should have put a muzzle on his dog in case of accidents,it wouldn\'t lead to a serious trouble.

>>> When the accident happened, the dog was not leashed so that terrible incident occurred.

>>> OR: If the owner of that dog leashed his pet, that accident wouldn\'t have happened.  

I don\'t think the dog was just a vicious dog.

>>> Correct!

Dogs have their nature.

>>> Correct!

If people want to bring them into the world where they live, they must know about their nature and need to take good care of them.

>>> Correct!

The owners must take responsibility for their dogs.

>>> Correct!