It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media.
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, it will be cause of juvenile crime rarely. When I was a kid, I didn\'t want to follow that kind of media. When I got stress, I wanted to watch provocative videos. I never got stress, after watching that media. On the contrary, I got stress for school and parents.
I didn\'t have solution for solving it. Video games, action movies, comic book were the way to loss stress. School teachers, parents didn\'t know what juvenile makes violent juvenile. they though that those things are just bad.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]ny! :)
Thank you for once again answering our essay question. I appreciate your honesty.
Thank you for once again answering our essay question. I appreciate your honesty.
I think juvenile crimes are influenced by a lot of factors and the media shouldn\'t be pinpointed as the sole reason for such.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re having a great evening.
See you again on Wednesday. ^^
~Teacher Charry
See you again on Wednesday. ^^
~Teacher Charry
In my opinion, it will be cause of juvenile crime rarely.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: In my opinion, crimes caused by juveniles happen rarely.
When I was a
kid, I didn\'t want to follow that kind of media.
>> CORRECT!
When I got stress, I
wanted to watch provocative videos.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: When I got stressed, I
wanted to watch violent videos.
I never got stress, after watching
that media.
>> I never got stressed, after watching
that kind of media.
On the contrary, I got stress for school and parents.
>> On the contrary, I got stressed from school and because of my parents.
I didn\'t have solution for solving it.
>> I didn\'t have a solution to solve it.
Video games, action movies, comic
book were the way to loss stress.
>> Video games, action movies, comic
book were my ways of relieving stress.
School teachers, parents didn\'t know
what juvenile makes violent juvenile.
>> School teachers and parents didn\'t know
what made juveniles violent.
they though that those things are
just bad.
>> They just assumed that those things are
just bad.
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