It is very simple,
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Great ideas again.
Thanks, I am so happy that you are so proud of your girlfriend.
I am sure that if she can read this. She will feel great.
We should always look for interesting things to get rid of bad habits.
Have a great night.
Teacher Nina
We can make them stop watching inappropriate thing with simple thing.
>> Did you mean: We can stop them from watching inappropriate shows by doing it simple.
Cut your internet wire.
>> Cut your internet connection.
Don\'t let them exposure to internet again.
>> Don\'t allow them to be exposed to the internet again.
>> Better: Don\'t let them use the internet again.
I think It is the best way to stop it.
>> I think those ways are the best to stop them.
but, I think the detuor way to let them stop watching bad thing is showing them another interesting things.
>> But I think a detour to let them stop from watching bad things is showing them another interesting program.
Habbit is so powerful that we can\'t vanish it without dominant effort.
>> Habit is so powerful that we can\'t get rid of it without effort.
but If it is good habit, it can be exchanged with bad things.
>> Did you mean: But if it is a good habit, it can night be changed to bad things.
Reading book is seemed like not interesting but there are many childran who really enjoy reading book everyday.
>> Reading books seemed like not interesting but there are many children who really enjoys it.
>> OR: Reading books seemed not interesting but there are lots of children who really enjoys it.
Like a watching badthings in internet, they became addicted from it.
>> Like watching bad things on the internet, they become more addicted from it.
In my case, I need a lot of time to escape from playing computer game.
>> In my case, I need a lot of time to escape from playing computer games.
because it was too addictive to turn off the game. It is too powerful,
>> Because it was too addictive to stop the game. It is too powerful.
but Since I found my Carolyn, I haven\'t played computergame.
>> But since I met Carolyn, I haven\'t played computer games that much.
She helps me.
>> correct
As you can see in my case, We need something more powerful than bad things
>> correct
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