It men feel more emotional, do you think that the world will be more balanced?
학생이 쓴 원문
If men feel more emotional, the world more balanced. men don\'t like to have sympathy, Their best value is different with women. That is achievement, in another words, taking something. They don\'t focus the process. So, if they care the process with emotion & sympathy, The world\'s direction will be changed.
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Good day, Jisu!
I couln\'t agree more with you. As mentioned in class, both genders have their respective traits. If we learn to become the other, then, we can master coexisting with each other.
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-T. Donna =)
>> If men feel more emotional, the world would be more balanced.
men don\'t like to have sympathy, Their best value is different with women.
>> Men don\'t like to have sympathy since their best value is different with women.
That is achievement, in another words, taking something.
>> Correct!
Or: That is by achievements, in others words, (taking/ possessing) something.
They don\'t focus the process.
>> They don\'t focus on the process.
So, if they care the process with emotion & sympathy, The world\'s direction will be changed.
>> So, if they care about the process with emotion & sympathy, the world\'s direction will be changed.
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