It's been a long time.

2011-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Tiny

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Long time no see in my composition :D The announcement which would orginally released at 5 pm has been postponed until 6:30 pm. I don't expect to pass it but what can't I do anything? Korea is still collecting for charity for Japan. There are many aspects of it. One of them is that why we help Japan even though we also have many people living in need. In fact, I saw the news on the internet saying that Japan rejected the food and necessaries that are the favor of the Korea big companies. Because they are reluctant by using and eating them come from another country. It's not that they don't have money. Just that they want more people who are volunteers of nuclear plants. However, they received the food and necessaries from U.S.A. The bigger problem is in my next composition.

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Hi [이름]! I feel like am reading the news while reading your composition. Haha! You can be my correspondent. -Tiny^0^   Long time no see in my composition :D >> Long time no write. (This is informal.) The announcement which would orginally released at 5 pm has been postponed until 6:30 pm. >> The announcement which would orginally be released at 5 pm has been postponed until 6:30 pm. >> The announcement which will be orginally released at 5 pm has been postponed until 6:30 pm. I don't expect to pass it but what can't I do anything? >> I don't expect to pass it but what can I do? >> I don't expect to pass it but can I do anything? Korea is still collecting for charity for Japan. >>correctThere are many aspects of it. >>correctOne of them is that why we help Japan even though we also have many people living in need. >> One of them is why do we help Japan even though we also have many people living in need. In fact, I saw the news on the internet saying that Japan rejected the food and necessaries that are the favor of the Korea big companies. >> In fact, I saw the news online saying that Japan rejected the food and necessaries that are favored by the Korea’s big companies. Because they are reluctant by using and eating them come from another country.>> They are reluctant on using and eating them because come from another country.It's not that they don't have money. >>correctJust that they want more people who are volunteers of nuclear plants. >> It’s just that they want more people who are volunteers of nuclear plants. However, they received the food and necessaries from U.S.A. >>correctThe bigger problem is in my next composition. >>correct. Kk ^-^v

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