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2011-03-31 · 첨삭 강사 Tiny

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I think that as all the people in Korea don't think the same way, neither do Japanese. But what makes all Korean people unpleasant is about the island of Dokdo. Although we have proven the reasons why it is belonged in Korea, we are fighting against unreasonable Japan. Jang-hoon Kim, the famous singer in Korea, always takes the lead in informing all around the world that it is belonged in Korea. He once was blamed for his cold response when the disaster happened. However, Japanese goverment announced yesterday that Dokdo will be marked on schoolbooks that it's belonged in Japan. Many Koreans favorable to Japan have turned their back on Japan. So the charity for Japan is being blamed more and more online. And the singer has been a hero. I also feel that ours is robbed by Japan again.

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Hi [이름]! Yeah, I’ve read a lot about Dokdo. And I also knew that according to history it is originally part of Korea. Though it is just an islet I know it means a lot to Korea. -Tiny^0^ I think that as all the people in Korea don't think the same way, neither do Japanese. >> I think that since all the people in Korea don't think the same way, neither do Japanese. But what makes all Korean people unpleasant is about the island of Dokdo. >>correctAlthough we have proven the reasons why it is belonged in Korea, we are fighting against unreasonable Japan. >> Although we have proven the reasons why it belonged to Korea, we are fighting over it against Japan unreasonably.Jang-hoon Kim, the famous singer in Korea, always takes the lead in informing all around the world that it is belonged in Korea. >> Jang-hoon Kim, the famous singer in Korea, always takes the lead in informing the world that it belonged to Korea. He once was blamed for his cold response when the disaster happened. >>correctHowever, Japanese goverment announced yesterday that Dokdo will be marked on schoolbooks that it's belonged in Japan. >> However, Japanese goverment announced yesterday that Dokdo will be marked on schoolbooks that it's (it has) belonged to Japan. Many Koreans favorable to Japan have turned their back on Japan. >>correctSo the charity for Japan is being blamed more and more online. >>correctAnd the singer has been a hero. >>correctI also feel that ours is robbed by Japan again. >>correct

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