It\'s positive development.
학생이 쓴 원문
It\'s positive development. Because we can do many things with phones. phone is a very good electronic device. we can say phone is a small version of computer. so i think phone became very common is great thing. as more people use we can communicate with more people easily. so i think it\'s positive development.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
It\'s positive development.
>>> It\'s a positive development.
Because we can do many things with our phones.
>>> CORRECT!
Cellphone is a very good electronic device.
>>> CORRECT!
we can say phone is a small version of computer.
>>> We can say that cellphone is a small version of computer.
so i think phone became very common is great thing.
>>> So cellphone became very common.
as more people use we can communicate with more people easily.
>>> As more people use cellphones, we can communicate with people easily.
so i think it\'s positive development.
>>> So, I think it\'s a positive development.
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