It was third day
학생이 쓴 원문
we got up early.
During having gone to the destination, we talked about our experience.
we talked a lot and we arrived at Luzern which is placed in the center of swiss.
Actually most of swiss is famous for winter sports, which means we need a lot of money, if we want to experience sports. we were not rich guys, so we have to be satisfied with windowshoping. and we found the house where we had booked.
the host welcomed us but I felt she really likes money. because she talked costs in every single words. if you want to eat breakfast you need to pay 10E and we can give you a ride but you have to pay 20E ..
anyway, we unpacked our luggage. we strolled the street.
Except for winter sports, Swiss had other famous things, these are knife and hired soldier. so we droped by shoping center and my friend bought a knife. and then we headed for Lion scarving.
강사 첨삭
Good morning!
Wow! Thanks for expressing your thoughts.
I had fun reading them. I do hope I got your ideas correctly.
Anyway, please go over the corrections.
Let\'s talk more about this in our class.
Have a great day!
~T. Nina~
we got up early.
>> We got up early.
During having gone to the destination, we talked about our experience.
>> During our trip, we talked about our experiences.^^
we talked a lot and we arrived at Luzern which is placed in the center of swiss.
>> We talked a lot then we arrived at Luzern which is a place in the center of Switzerland.
Actually most of swiss is famous for winter sports, which means we need a lot of money, if we want to experience sports.
>> Actually, Switzerland is famous for its winter sports, which means we need a lot of money if we want to experience these sports.
we were not rich guys, so we have to be satisfied with windowshoping.
>> We are not rich, so we have to be satisfied with window shopping.^^
and we found the house where we had booked.
>> We found the house that we had booked.
the host welcomed us but I felt she really likes money.
>> The host welcomed us but I felt like she really likes money.
because she talked costs in every single words.
>> Because she talked about the cost right away.^^
if you want to eat breakfast you need to pay 10E and we can give you a ride but you have to pay 20E ..
>> If you want to eat breakfast, you need to pay 10E and we can give you a ride but you have to pay 20E.^^
anyway, we unpacked our luggage. we strolled the street.
>> Anyway, we unpacked our luggage then we strolled along the streets.
Except for winter sports, Swiss had other famous things, these are knife and hired soldier.
>> Aside from winter sports, Swiss is also famous for its knives and hired soldiers.
so we droped by shoping center and my friend bought a knife.
>> So we dropped by the shopping center and my friend bought a knife.
and then we headed for Lion scarving.
>> Then we headed to the lion carvings.^^
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