It was too competive .
학생이 쓴 원문
teacher Im sorry that I dont understand the meaning of what you wrote.
the failure ? you mean score "F"?
If I get that score in academy, I would get back to academy in vacation season.
If I get two times, F score, I would be kicked out of the academy.
fortunatly, I graduated academy.
I became an officer!
anyway, I will be a good leader in airforce.
I liked to play around with my friends,
so I was not a good student in academecally.
Good leader have to be a wise man.
so I will study in many ways.
I don't be the man who reget one's past.
Actully I was tired when I get in academy.
The system of Korean education need student to study very hard.
so many students have to study hard, because their score exact means their abillty. Specially high school students do.
When the major test is over, they pay attention to their score and the grade.
If they want or not, their university is choosen by their grade.
so It seems like a war, I was soldier too in the past.
It was too com
강사 첨삭
Hello there!
And the competition among students in Korea is very fierce!
It\'s good that you were able to overcome those difficulties;)
And I\'m sure you were able to learn many things from those!^^
Thanks for posting your composition!
See you:)
~~T. Nina^^
teacher Im sorry that I dont understand the meaning of what you wrote.
>> Teacher, I\'m sorry. I didn\'t understand the meaning of what you have written.
>> Better: I\'m sorry, teacher. I didn\'t undertand what you wrote.
the failure ? you mean score \"F\"?
>> Did you mean: Does it mean failure when you get the score of\"F\"?
If I get that score in academy, I would get back to academy in vacation season.
>> If I get that score in the academy, I would go back again during vacation.
If I get two times, F score, I would be kicked out of the academy.
>> If I get two F\'s. I would be kicked out from the academy.
fortunately, I graduated academy.
>> Fortunately, I already graduated from the academy.
I became an officer!
>> Correct!
anyway, I will be a good leader in airforce.
>> Anyway, I would be a good leader in the air force.
I liked to play around with my friends,so I was not a good student in academecally.
>> I liked to play around with my friends, so I was not a good student in the academy.
Good leader have to be a wise man.
>> A good leader has to be a wise man.
so I will study in many ways.
>> Correct! >> OR: I will study in different ways.
I don\'t be the man who reget one\'s past.
>> I won\'t be the man who regrets one\'s past.
Actully I was tired when I get in academy.
>> Actually, I was tired when I got into the academy.
The system of Korean education need student to study very hard.
>> The Korean education system requires students to study very hard.
so many students have to study hard, because their score exact means their abillty.
>> So many students have to study hard because their score exactly means their ability.
Specially high school students do.
>> Especially for high school students.
When the major tes t is over, they pay attention to their score and the grade.
>> When the major tests are over, they pay attention to their scores and grades.
If they want or not, their university is choosen by their grade.
>> Whether they like or not, they were chosen to enter some university based on their grades.
so It seems like a war, I was soldier too in the past.
>> So it seems like a war. I was a soldier too in the past.
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