Jake\'s wirting homework
학생이 쓴 원문
I agree with that, because if you want to enjoy something, you should practice hard for it. Also, there are lots of proverbs that relate to this. Ex: No pain No gain or Dream is not easy. Many famous people always say that they worked very hard to get to this position. So, we can know that if we want to achieve our goal, we should work really hard.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Jake! This was a good start for your writing however, I\'d like to inform you that IELTS Writing Task 2 requires 250 words! Nevertheless, you should practice writing longer next time. Have a goodnight!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I agree with that, because if you want to enjoy something, you should practice hard for it.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> I agree with the statement because if you want to enjoy something, you should practice hardly.
Also, there are lots of proverbs that relate to this.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> Moreover, there are proverbs which are related to this.
Ex: No pain No gain or Dreams are not easy.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Many famous people always say that they worked very hard to get to this position.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>> Many famous people always quote that they strived hard to get to their position.
So, we can know that if we want to achieve our goal, we should work really hard.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>> So, we know that if we want to achieve our goal, we should work really hard.
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