Jan.29.2012.
학생이 쓴 원문
For a long time,I wrote my composition
Have you been happy lastweekend?
I went hiking with my girlfriend.
It was full of fun for me because i like kind of exercise.
and my girlfriend looked like not bad. after than,we went to BBQ restauran which is BBQ buffet.
I think that we ate sort of ten portions.
We felt so tired after finishing it and she bought a soaking solution at mart.
I think that it's more expensive than E-mart.
She was grumble at that time but i was not complained to her because i like her.
So the last weekend i was so happy.
But i think that we have to change our Korea's culture such as adult's culture.
In my case,Old people culture have opportunism and individualism.
We have to change these cultureS but as far as i've experienced alot of people who were almost old people.
Don't want to change their insistence and Don't Listen to other's opinions.
But i know that In my country we prefer confuncian idea such as old people are all right about their opinion.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!!! It\'s nice to know that you enjoyed your weekend with your girlfriend. I hope both of you would have more fun for the coming days, weeks, months and years to come. Take care and talk to you soon then.
Teacher Lara
For a long time,I wrote my composition
>> For a long time, I haven\'t written my composition.Have you been happy lastweekend?
>> CorrectI went hiking with my girlfriend.
>> CorrectIt was full of fun for me because i like kind of exercise.
>> I was full of fun for me becuase I like that kind of an exercise.and my girlfriend looked like not bad. after than,we went to BBQ restauran which is BBQ buffet.
>> And my girlfriend seemed not bad. After that, we went to a BBQ restaurant which has a BBQ buffet.I think that we ate sort of ten portions.
>> I think that we ate ten servings of it.We felt so tired after finishing it and she bought a soaking solution at mart.
>> We felt so tired after we finished eating and she bought a soaking solution at a mart.I think that it\'s more expensive than E-mart.
>> CorrectShe was grumble at that time but i was not complained to her because i like her.
>> She was grumpy at that time but I did not complain because I like her.So the last weekend i was so happy.
>> So I was so happy last weekend.But i think that we have to change our Korea\'s culture such as adult\'s culture.
>> But I think that we have to change Korea\'s culture such as the adult\'s culture.In my case,Old people culture have opportunism and individualism.
>> In my case, old people\'s culture practice oppotunism and individualism. people who were almost old people.
>> People who are considered old or who are in their senior years.
Don\'t want to change their insistence and Don\'t Listen to other\'s opinions.
>> They don\'t want to change their philosophies and don\'t listen to other\'s opinions.But i know that In my country we prefer confuncian idea such as old people are all right about their opinion.
>> But I know that in my country we prefer Confucianism ideas such as old people are right about their opinion.
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