Jane\'s Oral Presentation 2

2021-12-02 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

학생이 쓴 원문

So our state officials should have the stamina to have the means to keep teaching. Above all, we, parents, cannot afford to pay extra to provide private lessons. 3. Would you please don’t fall into the trap of ourselves? And please do something unwise that at first seemed like a good idea. Music and art classes are methodologically wonderful means of education. Students could be appreciated and grateful for the positive functions of art and music mentally and socially. They can learn that they are treated as students through art and music classes which provide them equality. Those classes can be productive break time between classes. It is also a good learning process to build persistence, courage, and discipline.

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I wish you all the best for your presentation! See you soon!-Faith-
So our state officials should have the stamina to have the means to keep teaching. 
>> So, our state officials should have the stamina to provide means for these.
Above all, we, parents, cannot afford to pay extra to provide private lessons.
>> Above all, we, parents, cannot afford to pay extra to provide private lessons.
3. Would you please don’t fall into the trap of ourselves? 
3. If possible, couldn\'t we fall into the trap of ourselves?
And please do something unwise that at first seemed like a good idea. 
>> Let us not be deceived by poisoned chalice.
Music and art classes are methodologically wonderful means of education. 
>> Music and art classes are methodologically wonderful means of education. 
Students could be appreciated and grateful for the positive functions of art and music mentally and socially. 
>> Students could be grateful for the positive functions of art and music mentally and socially.
They can learn that they are treated as students through art and music classes which provide them equality.
>> These could give them an impression that they are treated as real students through art and music classes which provide them equality.
Those classes can be productive break time between classes.
>> Those classes can be productive things to do between classes.
It is also a good learning process to build persistence, courage, and discipline.
>> CORRECT

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