JAPAN EARTHQUAKE

2011-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Karla

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Japan experienced a great earthquake. The strongrate was 9.0. This the world's 4th strongest earthquake ever. Also, there are more and more afterwards earthquakes. There was about 650 afterwaqrds earthquake and over 125 was over the strong rate of 5.0. It's quit strong. The people who were found dead or injured was about 500 people.However the are 10000people missing. Japan government is saying that there will be about 10000people dead because of this earthquake. Unfortunately, the nuclear power plant exploded. nuclear power plant 1 and 3. The Japan government said that if the incident goes serious the nuclear power plant number 2 will also explode. It's a sad story. I hope japan can overcome this incident in a short time.

강사 첨삭

Hello Joey! You did a great job in writing this composition. You were able to share your knowledge about this tragic incident. I agree with you that this is a sad story. I believe that with help from other countries, a lot of perseverance, hard work and prayers, the entire nation of Japan will recover. Have a great evening! Karla   Japan experienced a great earthquake. >>Correct OR>>There was a massive earthquake in Japan. The strongrate was 9.0. >>The magnitude was 9.0. This the world's 4th strongest earthquake ever. >> This is the world's 4th strongest earthquake ever. Also, there are more and more afterwards earthquakes. >> Also, there are more and more aftershock earthquakes. There was about 650 afterwaqrds earthquake and over 125 was over the strong rate of 5.0. >> There were about 650 aftershock earthquakes and over 125 were over the magnitude 5.0. It's quit strong. >>It's quite strong. The people who were found dead or injured was about 500 people. >> The people who were found dead or injured were about 500. However the are 10000people missing. >> However there are 10000people missing. Japan government is saying that there will be about 10000people dead because of this earthquake.>> Japan government is saying that there will be about 10000people dead because of this earthquake. Unfortunately, the nuclear power plant exploded. >>Correct OR>> Unluckily, a nuclear power plant exploded. nuclear power plant 1 and 3. >> Nuclear power plants 1 and 3. The Japan government said that if the incident goes serious the nuclear power plant number 2 will also explode.>> The Japanese government said that if the incident worsens the nuclear power plant number 2 will also explode.It's a sad story. >>Correct OR>>This is a miserable story. I hope japan can overcome this incident in a short time. >> I hope Japan can overcome this incident in a short time.

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