Japanese life 11

2017-03-21 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

On the sixth day, it was the last day we could spend in Japan. So, we were sorry about it. Anyway, we ate the rest of the sushis and sashimis we bought yesterday and went to the airport by taking a taxi because the departure time for Incheon in Korea was 9:50 am. When we arrived in Korea at 11:00 am, we needed to deal with the souvenirs we bought on our trip. So, we thought how we made the souvenirs look like fabulous. Finally, we decided to buy some packaging materials and write a memo to cover our souvenirs. Because our souvenirs and other baggage were very heavy and bulky, we decided to cover them and write a breif memo separately in a cafe near to where we were. After packaging all of them, we were hungry and were determined eat Chinese dishes in a restaurant. After eating the dishes, lastly we said each other 'Good bye, it was very fun and rewarding trip and I won't forget the trip with you.' Thank you for reading.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

Your adventure in Japan ended in a happy note so that\'s great. I guess your next trip abroad will be two years from now after you military service. Well, at least you had  a memorable trip in Japan before going in!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

On the sixth day, it was the last day we could spend in Japan.

>> correct!

So, we were sorry about it. Anyway, we ate the rest of the sushis and sashimis we bought yesterday and went to the airport by taking a taxi because the departure time for Incheon in Korea was 9:50 am.

>> correct!

When we arrived in Korea at 11:00 am, we needed to deal with the souvenirs we bought on our trip.

>> correct!

So, we thought how we made the souvenirs look like fabulous.

>> So we thought of a way to make the souvenirs  look fabulous.

Finally, we decided to buy some packaging materials and write a memo to cover our souvenirs.

>> Finally, we have decided to buy some packaging materials and wrote a  note to cover our souvenirs.

 Because our souvenirs and other baggage were very heavy and bulky, we decided to cover them and write a brief memo separately in a cafe near to where we were.

>> correct!

After packaging all of them, we were hungry and were determined to eat Chinese dishes in a restaurant.

>> correct!

After eating the dishes, lastly we said each other \'Good bye, it was very fun and rewarding trip and I won\'t forget the trip with you.\'

>> After eating the dishes, we said to each other \'Good bye, it was very fun and rewarding trip and I won\'t forget the trip with you.\'

Thank you for reading.

>> correct!

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