Japanese Life 2

2017-02-17 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

After sightseeing there, we ate a pancake, ham and bread in "Blue Hawai". The Japanese clerks in the place were very kind for us. They helped us pick a menu well and recommended a good event. So, we could enjoy the food and take a donut from this event. When we went back to our accommodation, we took some rest, because we were a little tired. And we went out to the 'Retro observatory'. in the evening. we oversaw a fantastic night view in it. We enjoyed taking picture with the view and ate precious cake and tea. After enjoying there, we came back to our accommodation. On the way, we shopped in a supermarket. We bought some snacks, beers, a bottle of sake(Japanese alcohol), sashimi and so on for our night eating party. While we were eating and drinking them, we were communicating with each other about our memory on the trip. When I was drinking sake, I felt very potent. So, I knew It is very hard for me to drink sake. My girl friend felt potent to drink it, too.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

Wow! you really had a great time in Japan. Those are good memories that you can keep for a long time. Have fun with your date tomorrow! See you on Monday!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

After sightseeing there, we ate a pancake, ham and bread in \"Blue Hawai\".

>> correct!

The Japanese clerks in the place were very kind for us.

>> The Japanese clerks in the place were very kind to us.

They helped us pick a menu well and recommended a good event.

>> correct!

So, we could enjoy the food and take a donut from this event.

>> correct!
When we went back to our accommodation, we took some rest, because we were a little tired.

>> correct!

And we went out to the \'Retro observatory\' in the evening.

>> correct!

We oversaw a fantastic night view in it.

>> We saw a fantastic night view there.

We enjoyed taking picture with the view and ate precious cake and tea.

>> We enjoyed taking pictures with the view and ate precious cake and tea.
After enjoying there, we came back to our accommodation.

>> correct!

On the way, we shopped in a supermarket.

>> correct!

We bought some snacks, beers, a bottle of sake(Japanese alcohol), sashimi and so on for our night eating party.

>> correct!
While we were eating and drinking them, we were communicating with each other about our memory on the trip.

>> correct!

When I was drinking sake, I felt very potent.

>> When I was drinking sake, it tasted very potent.

So, I knew It is very hard for me to drink sake.

>> correct!

My girl friend felt potent to drink it, too.

>> My girlfriend said the same thing too.

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