Japanese Life 2
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
Wow! you really had a great time in Japan. Those are good memories that you can keep for a long time. Have fun with your date tomorrow! See you on Monday!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
After sightseeing there, we ate a pancake, ham and bread in \"Blue Hawai\".
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The Japanese clerks in the place were very kind for us.
>> The Japanese clerks in the place were very kind to us.
They helped us pick a menu well and recommended a good event.
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So, we could enjoy the food and take a donut from this event.
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When we went back to our accommodation, we took some rest, because we were a little tired.
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And we went out to the \'Retro observatory\' in the evening.
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We oversaw a fantastic night view in it.
>> We saw a fantastic night view there.
We enjoyed taking picture with the view and ate precious cake and tea.
>> We enjoyed taking pictures with the view and ate precious cake and tea.
After enjoying there, we came back to our accommodation.
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On the way, we shopped in a supermarket.
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We bought some snacks, beers, a bottle of sake(Japanese alcohol), sashimi and so on for our night eating party.
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While we were eating and drinking them, we were communicating with each other about our memory on the trip.
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When I was drinking sake, I felt very potent.
>> When I was drinking sake, it tasted very potent.
So, I knew It is very hard for me to drink sake.
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My girl friend felt potent to drink it, too.
>> My girlfriend said the same thing too.
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